Reflection on Project 3 Draft

In this post I will be providing links to the commentary I have done on other peoples project drafts. I will also be answering questions about my draft and my process for drafting.

Swearingen, Johnathan, "Quantum-Physics" uploaded 22 February 2008 via deviantart.com. Attribution Non-commercial No Derivatives 3.0 License.

I review both Lawrence's and Isaak's drafts.

1) The only person to review my draft was Victoria Snapp.

2) I found Victoria's comments on my article to be quite helpful specifically the discussion about my purpose. I found that after looking back over my article it did seem to be more focused around the difficulty of scientific interaction instead of the quantum consciousness debate. The vast majority of what she commented on was what I was hoping for like appealing to a larger audience with the humor. She comments a lot on the humor in my paper which I hoped is what would draw people in and keep them interested in it, which she was.

3) The section that I need the most work on is the purpose section. I will take care of this by either adding another section about the debate itself or possibly adding more on the debate at hand in one of the paragraphs. I also think that I need to stay focused on the the topic and not go off on tangents about useless information and jokes.

4) I wasn't able to attend any meetings because the times that I would be able to go were taken by the time I got around to RSVPing, however after looking at the peer reviews of my article I feel very good about the direction of my paper.  I think that there is a little bit more content I need to add but the vast majority of my argument is complete. It seems that it is very humor driven which is what I wanted so possibly looking a bit more at how to revise the humor or focus it on the topic and not stray away from it.