Tuesday, October 13, 2015

Draft Thesis Statements

In this post I will be giving you three different thesis statements for my rhetorical analysis essay. I will also be telling you a little about them, what I think of them, what I had trouble with and where my project might be heading.
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In Matthew Francis's article "Quantum and Consciousness Often Mean Nonsense", Francis relies almost entirely on his credibility through use of his expertise in the field and providing links to further reading, to convey to his rather educated audience that cross-disciplinary research should be a cautious pursuit. While he does rely heavily on his character, his logic strategies hinder his argument due to the lack of persistent use of logical arguments.

  • This thesis, while I think is not as strong as I'd hope it'd be does have everything that I want to talk about. My main struggle with this thesis was that the wording of my thoughts about the article was hard to put into a readable statement. Using this thesis, I would probably continue by heavily analyzing his use of ethos then continue to show why his logical argument falls short.
Although Matthew Francis does use some logical strategies to convey his argument that cross disciplinary research should be done with caution, they hinder rather than help his argument while his use of his character, such as his expertise and use of outside information, is what propels the article forward to convey his message to his rather educated audience.
  • I think this is the stronger of the two theses because it seems more condensed and seems to carry more power behind it as a result. From this thesis, I would continue by discussing his logical argument, then explaining how his ethical argument is disguised as a logical argument and the concluding by discussing in detail why this article uses ethos so much.

2 comments:

  1. I like that you were straightforward in your theses and stated that certain elements of the piece was ineffective in a rhetorical sense. I might have to go back to my own theses and add something about the text that was ineffective. Based on your theses, I'm sure your analysis will go well! Good luck!

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  2. Your theses are both very difficult to process. You use a lot of big words in one sentence. Don't be afraid to write multiple sentences, devise an entire introduction, then pick out your thesis from there. The second, for instance, is almost entirely a run on sentence. Cut it down so it is easy to digest.

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